Tuesday, February 26, 2019

An ode to the lovely cloud



Look at them clouds 
Like cotton over the searching eyes 
Soft and fluffy 
Like a kitty’s coat

Evaporation 
Condensation 
Cumulus 
Nebulous 

Heavy as my heart 
All the vapour sponged in
Waiting to explode 
I can already smell the raindrop hit the ground

Why watch the stars? 
When you can watch them 
Shape shifting clouds 
They tell our stories as 
We walk down on earth 
Our heads to the ground
Just look around!


34 comments:

  1. Shape shifting clouds
    They tell our stories as
    We walk down on earth
    Our heads to the ground

    Nicely done!!

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  2. I agree why watch the stars when clouds prove to be so much more inspirational! ❤️

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  3. Our world is so beautiful. There is something for everyone , the seas, the skies, the forests, mountains and animals, birds, fish and so much more. Lets hope we love them enough them to keep them for our children. We can't just rely on poets to tell the world but we will try!

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  4. There's something about the smell of the world before a good rainstorm. I too have been captivated by a sky before the storm.

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  5. Love this line — “I can already smell the raindrop hit the ground...” I immediately was there with you.

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  6. Oh yes, these shape shifting clouds portray so much and these stories can indeed bind us in their beautiful narrative. I love what you did here: "Heavy as my heart /All the vapour sponged in/Waiting to explode".

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  7. I love the smell of petrichor. Not a cloud in the sky yesterday but still I gazed at that beautiful blue. But I love watching the stars as well.

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    1. There is a lot of inspiration and solace we can gain if we just look above

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  8. There is so much to see and admire in clouds.

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  9. Love this. Clouds are certainly fascinating to watch.

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  10. Clouds are so amazing. I love to watch them. Yesterday I saw a line of clouds that almost looked like handwriting. Yes, thank you for telling people to look up!

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  11. I really liked the lines
    "Heavy as my heart
    All the vapour sponged in
    Waiting to explode"

    These really resonated with me!

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  12. Looking! With such an invitation, I see what's there as well as my dreams.

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  13. The poem closes with four stellar lines! Have we time 'to stand and stare'? A good reminder.

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  14. Beautiful compliment to clouds. I love them too.

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  15. I like the idea of clouds telling our stories........the image of us walking around with our heads down looking at the ground makes me think clouds exist to remind us to Keep Looking Up! Smiles.

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  16. They are wonderful to watch, you have captured that beautifully here!

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  17. Love this "All the vapour sponged in Waiting to explode"and shape shifting clouds. Very clever

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  18. I love the thought of clouds that feel fluffy like the coat of a soft cat. What a wonderful treat for the senses.

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  19. Loved the last lines....clouds are so interesting to watch.... beautiful third stanza....

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  20. Beautifully crafted, with joyous similes and a keen rhyme scheme. Already has me reconsidering clouds!

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