Steady Meanderings. : Standing tall

Thursday, January 20, 2022

At the cusp of my downfall

I stand tall

Loyalty only has gotten me so far

to this toxic devious stick

performing its gleeful shtick

I laugh at my own demise

Isn’t this the whole premise?

I got my life force sucked out of me

One evil kiss at a time

Sugar diabetes lung incapacity what not

My vestiges still flutter

Just pour on the butter

Let me roll in the gluttonous gutter.

Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 21, 2022 at 11:12 AM
Nice rhyming and word play!
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scotthastiepoetJanuary 21, 2022 at 7:03 PM
Visceral and powerful Samyuktha - I loved it.... Such fresh and inspired writing...
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phillip woodruff (jalopy dreams)January 21, 2022 at 9:24 PM
we all have to die of something, why not death by flavor? loved the rhythm and the sounds of this poem. enjoyed very much
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HelenJanuary 21, 2022 at 9:50 PM
Fluttering vestiges ... I've never read anything quite like this ... AND I love it.
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indybevJanuary 22, 2022 at 12:33 AM
Shaking your fist at fate can be satisfying!
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Gillena CoxJanuary 22, 2022 at 1:48 PM
"My vestiges still flutter"
Bravo! Brilliant! Samjukta

Much love...
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ThotpurgeJanuary 22, 2022 at 2:06 PM
The opening two lines drew me in- strong!
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purplepeninportland.comJanuary 25, 2022 at 7:02 AM
Powerful, clever poem!
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Yvonne OsborneJanuary 28, 2022 at 6:56 PM
Clever wordplay. I like the first three lines, and really love rolling in butter!
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